Here I am pulling phrases from my This I Believe essay that potray to the five senses. This exercise allows me to check if I am being descriptive enough in my essay.
Sight
Sound
Smell
Touch
Taste
Doing this exercise allowed me to realize I was more so telling the scene and not describing the scene. After this exercise I will be sure to add more sentences that explain how all 5 of my senses were active in this scene. Adding this to my story will allow my reader to not just read my story but feel my story.
Sight
- The lights were still too bright for my eyes to adjust.
- I wrap my yellow karate belt around my waist.
- I look around and I see red belts, blue belts, and even black belts.
- The soft red and blue mats were no comfort for the uneasiness I feel.
Sound
- All the kids laughed.
Smell
Touch
- The crust was still holding them shut.
- I’m clutching the arms of the plastic white chair that I’m sitting in.
- The soft red and blue mats were no comfort for the uneasiness I feel.
- My stomach floats up my throat.
Taste
Doing this exercise allowed me to realize I was more so telling the scene and not describing the scene. After this exercise I will be sure to add more sentences that explain how all 5 of my senses were active in this scene. Adding this to my story will allow my reader to not just read my story but feel my story.